Comments on Untitled 2505 by Dan Gilbert

• A good read
• For what it's worth, it's my opinion that you should share the smells and sights with the reader, not just say you enjoyed them, then the reader can join in the story instead of just being told about it. "On a daily basis" this is the worst cliche of our times and if I see you using it again in a story I'll have to hunt you down and shoot you. What's wrong with saying 'daily' or 'every day'? Not enough syllables for you? It was probably a good story but I didn't get past that cliche because I was afraid of finding others and getting even more annoyed.
• Smashing a really entertaining read.

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