Comments on Cora by Charlie Fish
- I was right there with you the whole time. Amazingly powerful descriptions with so little language. It really made me feel. I'm writing a sociological literary critique on it for my college writing course. My only complaint is the lack of protection used in the sex scene. Though it added an element of reality, it took my emotions from excitement and wonderment to reluctance. I love the piece! ~Kristin
- That's really the way life is, isn't it. We're all moving around in the dark, trying, or not trying, to make contact with all of the others who are moving around in the dark, trying, or not trying, to make contact. And even when we do make contact, even intimate contact, we don't really know who we've made contact with. Very interesting story. Russ
- I read your story "Cora" and I completely fell in love with the way you write I love that sort of realism and I felt like I was in the room with you I am a budding writter myself and at the ripe old age of 16 I know I'm not the best critic but I just had to tell you that I think you're fantastic Caitlin
- Hello Mr. Fish, Id hope this is the Charlie Fish that wrote Cora? I had to read that story and i fell in love with it the first time. You write very well. Your storys make poeple think and that very insightful. Keep them coming. Thanks, Ashley
- Dear Mr Fish, this email is to thank you for letting people read your stories for free on the internet. I especially would like to thank you for offering your story "Cora". I found myself in a similar state of mind - and friendship and was most amazed reading about a character like me. I have learned and understood a lot. So this is to thank you, Anne Rass
- Good read, thanks for sharing.
- What a bizarre experience you've captured for us! I enjoyed the story.
- Hi, I enjoyed reading your story. It does sound like a dream. It has that dream-like quality. You have a few sentences that need a little work, but I wanted to comment on the plot, and the story as a whole. You give a good description of your trek to the bed, when you first entered the room. Your description of the dark room was also excellent. In fact, all the description you used was very realistic. The only thing I noticed, is there didn't seem to be a lot of action, other than the sexual scene. Maybe you could have something happen between meeting finding your way to the room, and meeting Cora, or maybe even afterward. But it felt a little draggy between the time he entered the room and until after he was through with Cora. This, of course is only my opinion. It just seemed to lack some action, either at the beginning, or toward the end. It did have that dream-like aspect to it, though, when the guy woke up and couldn't find her. It made the reader wonder if she was really there at all. You could really continue the story, if you wanted to. The ending is not definite. Your description of the sexual segment was very good, and the imagery was excellent too. I especially liked the ending because it has so many possibilities, and it adds that dream-like quality. Also, it leaves the reader wondering. You did a good job. I enjoyed reading your story, and although it needs some work, as far as the grammar and sentence structure goes, it's a good piece. If you decide to continue writing from the ending, I' d like to read it.
- I'm going to have a real problem critting this story - I'm so torn about it. On the one hand, it is the perfect fantasy, isn't it? And your writing is very easy to read, it flows smoothly and there are no jumps or bad grammar to detract and distract. On the other, there is a lot of "hello, how are you" kind of dialogue that takes the story no-where and doesn't add to the tension. Also, the lovemaking and climax are over too quickly for me (God! I sound awful! - please don't read anything into that! He! He! He! I told you this would be a tough one!)
- This is an entertaining story, easy to follow. Believable. Mildly sexy but not pornographic at all (tough to manage!). Cora's believable. She's intelligent (if a little reckless/foolish with her health) and funny. The sex scene adds to the plot. A little action (cough cough) in an otherwise cerebral story... I think this captures some of the frustrations and confusion of contemporary life. This is a good story. Good luck with getting it published.
- Other than some minor ambiguities, I think this story was extremely well done. The characters and setting were certainly believable, and the air of mystery at the end made it all the more intriguing. Kudos to you for remembering your dream so vividly!
- I like your story here. It kept me engaged the entire time. I thought the sex scene was very tastefully done.
- Thank you for this story... You really have a very fertile mind for writing stories. I actually got into your story and almost began to believe it as a true story :) . Nice work. Peter Addo
- It was nice to see your comment as the story made me wonder if it was real or just a drunken man's wet dream. Either way, you have brought to life most men's secret fantasy. I thoroughly enjoyed the read. Good job! JWC
- Author's comment: I dreamt this over a weekend while living in Balham, and woke up just itching to write it down. Although the dream didn't get as far as the sex scene!
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