Comments on Rations by John Pegg
- A strong story, with an ending that took me completely by surprise. Well done. I like the first person narrative, it makes it more personal. A bit wordy at times, however. For example "vehicle in utter disarray" when "wrecked" would have been better. Also a bit heavy on adjectives at times, I found. Nothing that couldn't be fixed with another editing though. Overall I enjoyed this unusual story, thank you. JS
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