Comments on The Wrong Answer by Michael Eberhardt
- Michael, I must admit I loved your story except for the ending. Im not a pro at being a critic so please keep that in mind. First, I want to commend you on tying the story together. The things you mentioned at the first of the story came out later in the story. I like that because it created questions in my mind and it kept me interested to know more. For instance, the note when it read, fix lunch for Teddy. You lingered on that for a few sentences and then towards the end you brought it to light, I loved that. Perfect!! I liked your description of the mother, I liked your description of what happened to Teddy and what was going to happen to the mother in a few weeks. The one thing I thought you should have done with this story is leave out the last part and just ended it with Molly committing suicide. Let me wonder what happened to her mother or just guess what happened to her. Other than that I thought it was a great story Michael and with a few revisions a lot of people will like it. It was believeable!! It was sad and it could be possible in many households today. Good luck!!
Back to top
Close this window to return to the story